Narrative rushes:......Feedback:
- realistic
- Worked for the audience
- some shots were blurry
- didnt really make sense with graveyard
- liked the table scene although lighting was bad
- good continuity
- shot of TV was shaky
- lighting was different for different shots
- last take at the end was too long and shaky
- story makes little sense
Performance rough cut:......Feedback:
- sometimes takes were too long
- costume was realistic
- facepaint was weird
- different shots had different lighting
- more enthusiasm for bassist
- ELS was cool when they switched postition
- costumes were good
- singer's singing was convincing
- liked the overlaying of the singer on top of the drumming
- some shots of the guitar solo was a bit off
- some syncing of singing shots were off
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Things to change:
- Add context to characters
- Stabilisation of shaky footage + re-shoot scenes of TV with tripod
- Straighten framing of TV (accidental dutch)
- Frame shots over graveyard with a high angle to avoid seeing the houses behind
- Costume
- Simon
- White Shirt
- Suit trousers
- Orange trainers
- Scarf
- Bring flowers to grave
- Take additional footage of stairs on different locations + edit so hop between each
- Edit entrance to bedroom so it is more obvious what they are about to do
- Make it more visible the push onto the bed
- Reshoot stair scene - lighting + blurry
- Reshoot kitchen
- Add kitchen clutter
- Framing
- More food
- Lighting
- Change outfits
- Remove chairs (only 2)
- different drink to water
- Different colour jackets
- Argument scene
- He grabs her
- Looks ashamed
- she leaves
- tightens i on arm grab
- Slap
- Add tightly framed close up
- More vignettes
- Some physical intimacy
- Her checking his phone
- Walk through park
Call Sheets
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Shot list
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Location
Underground Parking lot:
- Middle of empty parking lot
- Have band car in being used
Costumes
- Isabel (keyboard)
- Black skirt
- Turtle neck stripped shirt
- ripped tights
- Red lip stick
- Simon (lead singer)
- All black suit (black shirt + jacket + trousers)
- Dress shoes
- Large belt buckle
- Hugo (Bass)
- Distressed light blue jeans
- Black button up shirt
- Thin leather bracelets
- Rubber bands
- Festival passes
- Biker boots
- Sam (Drums)
- Converse / vans (black and white)
- Tattoo sleeves (sleeve + sharpie)
- Oversized shirt (black)
- Distressed black jeans
- Combats
- Hannah (Guitar)
- Leather jacket
- Low cut crop top
- Black jeans / combat trousers
- Purple lipstick
- Black eye-liner
- Choker / neck strap
Props
- Guitar
- Bass
- Drumkit + drumsticks
- Snare
- Bass drum
- Top drums
- Crash symbol x2
- 2 Amps
- 2 Leads
- Mic + Microphone stand
- Car to unpack all equipment
REFLECTION
Directing:
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